The girls stared across the table at each other. Each clutched a brightly colored piece of paper in dirty fingers.
The warden tapped his watch.
“Which one’s it gonna be?”
Hana watched as her younger sister slowly unfolded her small pink slip. Janey’s face contorted into a silent victorious howl as she shot up from her old chair to take a lap around the room.
Hana slumped, defeated.
“Ok Hana, let’s go.”
“No!” Without thinking, Hana was up and running towards the muddy grass outside. “You’ll never take me alive!”
Her father groaned towards the sky, “It’s just a bath.”
Word Count: 100
A write for Rochelle’s weekly Friday Fictioneer’s. Thank you Rochelle for keeping it in line as always.
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Nice twist. I didn’t see that coming
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Thank you!
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Sounds familiar but thankfully those days are pretty far behind me now! My kids love a bath!!
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It’s behind me too! I still think it’s hilarious that bath time could just be the worst punishment sometimes
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I agree, baths rock as far as I’m concerned!
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Such a twist!
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Thank you!
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Great set up. I loved the last line. Made me smile.
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Thank you for reading! Glad it made you smile.
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Such a fun story! Love how everything seemed so dark, but then lightened up at the end.
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Thank you! My daughter used to believe bath time was prison. I can only imagine I was the warden
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A splashing story! Nice one.
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Thank you! I appreciate it
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Fun and funny take on the prompt – I love that final howl of rebellion too 🙂
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Ha! Thank you! I could just see poor dad with two post mud splashing kids trying to get them in the bath.
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I don’t envy him!
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Nice twist!!!
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Thank you! I appreciate it
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I read this with increasing trepidation – and then you got me with that last line! Brilliantly done.
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Thank you so much!
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Hah! I love the innocent ending.
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Thank you!
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The twist caught me too–and gave me a huge smile. You get 5 stars from me.
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Thank you so much!
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I so love it when a writer makes me burst out laughing!
Loved this, Kelley.
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Thank you! Glad it got you laughing
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Love the twist. I was expecting something more sinister. But a bath! I can relate to that… when my littles were younger.
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Ha, it’s definitely relatable. Thanks for reading!
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This was too funny, I love the twist.
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Thank you for reading!
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Hahahaha what a delightful little story! PS love the design of your blog.
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Thank you for reading and thank you on the design
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Great last line, you built the tension well
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Thank you!
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Loved it! It was a nice twist but you did supply hints like the dirty fingers. Well done!
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Thank you!
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A fun take. Needed a light read. Well done.
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it
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