“What do you see?”
I see the future. I see you and me. I see my heart exploding. I see a million fireworks. I see galaxies.
I feel it all within me.
I see our first kiss, unintentionally wonderful. I see awkward laughs and gentle embraces.
I see lives intertwined, threads to a needle connecting time.
I see my past fade away at your touch.
I see light fill empty spaces.
“What do I see?”
I see I’m in love with you but I can’t tell you that.
“It just looks like a fire dying in the night to me.”
“What do I see?”
I see I’m in love with you but I can’t tell you that.
“It just looks like a fire dying in the night to me.”
Word Count: 100
For Friday Fictioneers, massive thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for wrangling this massive flash fiction challenge in every week.
Why is the rum gone?
This is beautiful.
They had to start the fire somehow.
Thank you
eventually every fire dies down
This is true. Thank you for reading
Lovely. An elegant portrait of all that’s unsaid
Thank you Neil
Beautifully understated. The final line was a real de-fuser of a potential relationship.
Thank you!
“I see lives intertwined, threads to a needle connecting time.”
Love how you weave so many elements together, beautiful imagery Kelley 🙂
Thank you. I rewrote that line several times so I’m happy it stood out.
It was worth it, Kelley 🙂
Nice romantic setup beside the fire. Everything else is so immaterial!
Thank you for reading and commenting!
Very well written. <3
Thank you!
I wonder how often love is left unsaid… there are so many obstacles, fear, conventions… alas with a love like that there should be some fire.
I fear it’s probably left unsaid more often than we realize. Thank you for reading!
This is gorgeous. Beautifully poetic.
Thank you!
Oh, come on! Please, just tell him–her? Do it! Do it!
Ha! Maybe they will! Maybe they’re just scared. I like to think it can end well for this story. Thanks for reading
Some just refuse to have a romantic bone in their body…
I really enjoyed this, Kelley.
This is true. Thanks for reading!
How sad; a love left incomplete, too common I should imagine. Where would we be if we starting acting on ALL the impulses we receive? Might be quite interesting I guess! Well written piece.
It would be a different world! Thanks for reading
As others have said, just tell him/her – life’s too short for doubt and regrets.