“What do you see?”
I see the future. I see you and me. I see my heart exploding. I see a million fireworks. I see galaxies.
I feel it all within me.
I see our first kiss, unintentionally wonderful. I see awkward laughs and gentle embraces.
I see lives intertwined, threads to a needle connecting time.
I see my past fade away at your touch.
I see light fill empty spaces.
“What do I see?”
I see I’m in love with you but I can’t tell you that.
“It just looks like a fire dying in the night to me.”
“What do I see?”
I see I’m in love with you but I can’t tell you that.
“It just looks like a fire dying in the night to me.”
Word Count: 100
For Friday Fictioneers, massive thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for wrangling this massive flash fiction challenge in every week.
Why is the rum gone?
This is beautiful.
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They had to start the fire somehow.
Thank you
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eventually every fire dies down
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This is true. Thank you for reading
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Lovely. An elegant portrait of all that’s unsaid
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Thank you Neil
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Beautifully understated. The final line was a real de-fuser of a potential relationship.
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Thank you!
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“I see lives intertwined, threads to a needle connecting time.”
Love how you weave so many elements together, beautiful imagery Kelley 🙂
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Thank you. I rewrote that line several times so I’m happy it stood out.
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It was worth it, Kelley 🙂
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Nice romantic setup beside the fire. Everything else is so immaterial!
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Thank you for reading and commenting!
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Very well written. ❤
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Thank you!
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I wonder how often love is left unsaid… there are so many obstacles, fear, conventions… alas with a love like that there should be some fire.
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I fear it’s probably left unsaid more often than we realize. Thank you for reading!
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This is gorgeous. Beautifully poetic.
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Thank you!
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Oh, come on! Please, just tell him–her? Do it! Do it!
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Ha! Maybe they will! Maybe they’re just scared. I like to think it can end well for this story. Thanks for reading
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Some just refuse to have a romantic bone in their body…
I really enjoyed this, Kelley.
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This is true. Thanks for reading!
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How sad; a love left incomplete, too common I should imagine. Where would we be if we starting acting on ALL the impulses we receive? Might be quite interesting I guess! Well written piece.
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It would be a different world! Thanks for reading
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